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It wasn’t sudden; it was calculated. We circled each other for months, waiting for the right moment to attack. Sharpening our claws. Looking for weaknesses. Finding none.

The first bolt of lightning. Our lips met. Electricity. Charged, we fought.

The low rumble of thunder. Your skin melted into mine like a poison. The primal drumbeats of the rain on the roof, driving us onward. Beads of moisture. We glowed from within, we darkened the sky.

The wind ripped the breath from my mouth. The wind, your lips. Both.

The ocean, frothing and churning. Ships crushed to splinters upon our shores. Lines of fire from my nails, your tongue. Static. We crackled, we blazed.

Burning into each other, we were a summer storm.
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Aus and I were doing quick writing prompts again. -shrug-
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todie017 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2009
the dynamics between the visuals and what the words are really saying are wonderful! really gets the reader to think and picture the strom in a deep counter intuitive way! so romatic and very poetic! it's just GREAT! FANTASTIC! :D :D :D
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh gosh, thank you so much!! I'm really glad the visuals were effective!
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burdge Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
gah! This is intense. It's astounding
to me that you can make the emotions so
strong and... clear with so few words!

this is amazing.
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you sooooo much~ You know I love getting comments from you. X3 And I'm so glad you like it, it was really experimental for me.
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burdge Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
you're welcome!
good to know you like hearing from me. :lol:
that's so sweeet!
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austheke Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009   Writer
You know I love this. xD

Your metaphors are simply amazing. Heartstopping. THUNDEROUS. BAH. I love how some of the sentences are just fragments--it makes it sharper, more violent. Which is perfect.

Love it. :heart:
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you my dearest darlingest pearl of my heart, flower of my existence. XD
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austheke Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2009   Writer
O dearest scintillating star of my wondering eyes, how I treasure these sweet honeyed words that drip like rain from your roselike crimson lips. I can do you, my most dearly beloved of soul and mind, no greater or humbler honor than to lay my heart at your ivory and perfect feet. -bows-

purple prose-loathing part of brain: :noes: -flaildie-
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I cannot utter words of such beauty as those that weave the silk of your skin, the black waterfall of your cascading tresses, the crystalline depths of your intelligent gaze. O, Goddess of my heart, the language to describe you is a poetry that my pen knows not!
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austheke Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2009   Writer
...-can't-

:noes:

you're better at this than me. xDD
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