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“All I’m saying,” she frowned, uncrossing and recrossing her legs under the table, “is that he should’ve been a man about it. I don’t see why he couldn’t say it to my face. You just don’t do that sort of thing over the phone. Not after eight months! Rook to C8.”

He nodded, readjusting his glasses as she’d found that he was apt to do when she’d made a move he didn’t expect. “That does seem really cheap,” he admitted, peering down at the board like an old man. “Did he give you a reason at all? Rook to C1.”

She let out a huffy breath and tossed one of her long braids over her shoulder, immediately drawing it back to run her hands over while she thought. “Yes.” Her hand fluttered over her rook for a moment before she drew it back, eyes darting around the board as she guessed at the succession of moves that would follow that choice. “He said…” she trailed off, tightening her lips and grabbing a piece. “Pawn to A5.”

“He did not,” he teased, sparing a moment to glance up at her over the battle that was taking place at their fingertips. For a moment their eyes met and her face was completely open, vulnerable. Then he looked away, back down at the board to assess his new predicament, and a shadow of disappointment flickered across her features before she banished it. “Really,” he said gently, hand hovering over the board as he made sure his decision was watertight, “What did he say? Queen to D2.”

“He said I was...distracted,” she said tersely, fingers working furiously at her braid as she unraveled it all the way up to her ears before quickly braiding it back together again with nimble fingers, like pulling a zipper up and down. He was enchanted by her hands. He wondered how they would move in his hair. “He said it seemed like I wasn’t always there. How could he say that? He was never there! Rook to C2.”

He cursed under his breath and brushed the slain rook aside, reexamining his situation. “Where did he think you were?” She was watching the way he chewed on his lip as he thought. Wondering if she would ever know how that felt. “It’s not like you were ever anything but tolerant and forgiving. He was like a goddamn toddler.” He glared at the slowly shrinking armies of black and white that embodied their struggle. “Rook to C2.”

“Setting yourself up,” she warned, and he shook his head and folded his hands neatly in front of him, confident in his defense. She shrugged. “He was convinced I was cheating on him. Said he could tell I wasn’t thinking about him. Kept pushing me. ‘Who is he, who is he?’ I told him it takes a cheater to have a suspicious heart and he thought I was dodging the question. Rook to C5.”

“Were you?” He asked calmly, looking straight at her and making no move to examine the implications of her move.

“Was I what?” She asked, meeting his gaze and flipping her braid back over her shoulder.

“Thinking about someone else,” he explained.

For a moment there was silence and they measured each other, bodies as stiff as animals deciding whether or not the other is a threat.

“Maybe,” she allowed finally, meeting his eyes levelly. He watched her, wanting her to be meaning what he wanted her to mean, unsure if she meant what she wanted him to think she meant. Because she meant it.

“Chris?” She prodded, a half-smile catching at the corner of her mouth. He looked up, expectant.

“It’s your move.”
Another prompt thing with =austheke. She's probably not going to post hers, though, because she is having another one of those periods where she thinks she's a bad writer. ;____; Please go and assure her otherwise, I can't do it alone. She doesn't believe me.

PEE ESS. Sorry, sorry, more crappy short romance fic. ;___; SORRY.

AND ALSO

MAN I LOVE DOUBLE ENTENDRES. "It's your move." teehee. X3

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pengwens Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
Awesome story...do they eventually get together?
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I....dunno? ._. this is all I wrote
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pengwens Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
Oh, okay. But you should continue, it is very good and the suspence is killing me:)
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nooooope this is flash fiction. It's done where it is. Glad you like it, though. C:
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pengwens Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
You're welcome!:)
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Kenna-bean Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, so cute!
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japanese-candayy Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Student Writer
Wow. Greatness.
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austheke Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2011   Writer
:iconandthenyou: reminded me how much I love this.
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
lkjsdlkfjasdf <33
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Knight-Emma Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
ahhhh so cute!!! please write more! these things are what keep me going!
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
ohman, my creative writing professor has kept me really busy writing highbrow literary fiction, so I haven't written any romantic snippets in a loooong time. XD
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Knight-Emma Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
oh that sucks!!!!!!
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art-is-an-expression Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011
I LOVE THIS!
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hooray! :D Thank you!
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crashcoursewomb Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2009
You're brilliant at writing speech. The way you did it was flawless and carried on the flow of it. I loved the way it was told and the story in general. great work. (: :heart:


sorry for the random outburst.
i'll be sure to check out some of your other writing. (:
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Ohmygosh, thank you so much! Gosh, that's a fantastic comment to recieve! Thank you!
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crashcoursewomb Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2009
haha, you're so welcome. I envy your talent. :P
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samjo989 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009
So... I really like this. I like the idea, I mean: the game of chess symbolising the "dance" between them. The dialogue flowed very naturally -- brilliantly, almost -- althought it was at times a little hard to follow with the interrupting chess moves.

For something written in 30 minutes, it's quite excellent. I think it shows you have a good grasp on people, you can write as though you're there listening to your characters speak. That's a good skill to have =)

I do have a couple of suggestions/things to point out, if you don't mind:

"He nodded, readjusting his glasses as she’d found that he was apt to do when she’d made a move he didn’t expect." -- maybe "readjusting his glasses as he usually did when she made an unexpected move" would flow better?

"He looked up, expectant." -- this threw me off a bit, because in my head he never looked down.

Yup =)
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, both of those are good suggestions. I'll take both of those into consideration and probably end up changing both parts. Thank you!

And thanks also for the compliments about my writing, to me it really is like hearing the characters speak in my head and I'm so glad it comes across as naturally as it sounds to me! And sometimes the chess moves threw me off, too, but considering that it also sometimes threw off the characters in their conversation, I think it's acceptable. ;D Thank you so much for your comment!
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austheke Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009   Writer
Hello, you did mean vomitously cute romantic deviations.
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austheke Featured By Owner May 2, 2009   Writer
I am angry that nobody came to comment. D:<
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austheke Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2009   Writer
GOD I ALWAYS FORGET TO COMMENT.

You know I love this. I love how it flows, how you use chess moves to knit it together, and how seamlessly you put in description and plot.

I love it. Possibly one of your best.

And believe me, that is saying a lot.

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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you darlinnngggg~

You don't /need/ to comment on these, you comment on them when I write them, haha! Don't feel like you have to. XD
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scarletti1 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2009
I want more! This was lovely to read, and the double entendres was so clever. It takes me forever to come up with one, and then they're usually so cheesy and cliche when i do find one that I like. :P

The flow of the piece was really nice, it was very easy to read. It doesn't feel like a piece written in a short amount of time. I think the only people that use "rook to C5", etc, are those who play seriously... I'm terrible at chess, and i couldn't imagine myself using words like that. Oddly enough (or not), it shaped how i viewed the characters. It fit well with her guy friend, but for the girl, i kind of imagined chess as one the things that she only does with him, but it's not something she usually does. Does that make sense? Sorry if it doesn't, i'm not my best at the moment. Anyway, quite lovely. I really enjoyed it. :)
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
OHMAN. You're so right. I mean, I don't know if I was consciously thinking that about the characters, but when you say that...that he's a serious player, and she only plays with him...it just totally fits.

Ha. X3 And thank you SO much. ;___; You are too kind.
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scarletti1 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2009
It's always the best whenever that kind of thing happens on accident. I find that incredibly satisfying when an action, or something said reveals something about a character, and/or their relationship with someone. It was lovely to read, so no worries. I hope you enjoyed writing it. :)
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burdge Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
AMAZING.
i literally fall in love with your characters
every. time.

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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwww thank you so much!! That means so incredibly much to me, you have no idea!
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sadlyNo Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2009
Ah, this is nice. I like the double meaning, the parallels.
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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sadlyNo Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2009
You are very welcome :)

Ugh, aus is having one of her phases again. We must poke her persistently until she comes out of it.
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Iyeshana Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
this is so awesome :) i absolutely love it! and i could see this in my mind very clearly, especially when she says the last line! brilliant!

..and I will tell Aus to post hers! hahahaa, I will berate her on msn. XD
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, thank you so much! Well, Aus didn't finish hers. D: But I like what she had a LOT.
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austheke Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009   Writer
Oh, be quiet. It's a rut and you and I both know it.
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Tear-Bleeder Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
Wow Ginny this is very good! I mean, of course I know nothing about writing and I almost never read books (LOL I'm retarded), but I think you really have talent. You set the mood perfectly and your descriptions are very clear and set a very neat image in my head - they're a bit long sometimes, though, but it doesn't really bother me that much. And that last line is very smart. I was like "HELLZ YEAH U GO GIRRRRRL!" and then I smiled because I liked how you handled the whole moment and how you ended it in a way that leaves us thinking what could have happened next.

Also: "Wondering is she would ever know how that felt", 6th paragraph. "Wondering if", right?

Anyway, really great job! :clap:
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Ohmigosh thank you so much!! And yes, you're so right. TYPO ALERT. WEE OOO WEE OOO WEE OOO
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Tear-Bleeder Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
So correct it already! :|
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
AH DID.

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Tear-Bleeder Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
Yeah, like NOW! D:

In other news:

HOMAGAWD THAT FACE IS SRSLY SCARY :iconguaahplz:
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG IKR
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burnoutbright Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
A sweet little story! One of my new favorites of yours. I really ought to try the writing prompts! :D

My one question...are they playing actual chess, because they say their moves aloud?
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
That was the idea, but I don't know anyone who actually says the moves like that. XD It just worked out really well with them saying their moves out loud. Haha!
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burnoutbright Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
You're right! I did like how it worked with them saying their moves aloud. :D But I did wonder. ;)
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, yeah, well, I wrote it in about thirty minutes. XD Not much time for complex thought!
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burnoutbright Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
:XD: Agreed! I'm amazed that something this sweet can be written in thirty minutes! :D
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Zappy09 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
wow *jealous* I wish I could write like that. I love the whole idea of the chess while they were talking :)
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!!
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Zappy09 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2009
your welcome =]
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ninereeds-DA Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009
Nicely done. I like the whole playing games thing.
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Ginnabean Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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